Re-Draft: 'Paper flight'

For our third day of the Lens Based Media exploratory week we had to review our six still images we had created ('aeroplane escape' storyboard) and re-draft the story for the second time. This is because after designing an idea - normally it will be discussed and redone until the finished product is 'perfect.' furthermore it means I could explore my concept and see which areas were weaker than the rest. I had the opportunity to improve my story and to make the concept even stronger. When going about changing my original storyboard I looked into the story and the characters. Personally there was two areas that I didn't like about my story: first was the last two frames (in the 'aeroplane escape' storyboard) I didn't like these frames because they didn't suit the climax of the previous four frames which I really liked. The second thing that I didn't like was the lack of detail that the aeroplane had in the story. Where was it going? What made it do what it was? And I felt that this had to be answered in order for the story to move forward and have a greater meaning.

 

The re-draft idea came from the clash of different goals that the girl and the paper aeroplane had. The girl was trying to catch her aeroplane however the aeroplane was trying to get away - I liked this concept however I decided to change the goals a bit for the re-draft. I also wanted to make the aeroplane the protagonist because it had a more unique perceptive. The storyboard above is as follows: the first frame shows the paper it its normal environment (introduction) it is plain and has no purpose as of yet and so feels lonely and useless. The second frame is a close up of an aeroplane in the sky. This shot is taken from the papers perceptive as it is looking out of the window and at the sky - here a dream and admiration has been created and we understand that the paper is longing to fly. The third frame shows the paper being lifted by the wind coming through the open door (the paper is able to fly.) However before the paper can reach the sky he is captured by a girl (fourth frame.) In the fifth frame we see that she is folding the paper and is changing the paper's body. The last frame we can see a twist as it has been  transformed into a paper aeroplane. I called this story 'Paper flight.'

 

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 What I found most challenging when doing this task was being able to fit enough story into the is frames. I felt it was hard to put enough obstacles and struggles into the three frames in the middle and keep the story going in an understandable way visually. Even now I think that I would have liked to add more struggles to this story however I am happy with the outcome because the story shows a goal which can be understand if the viewer reads into each frame well. e.g. understanding that the paper is not happy in the first frame whereas in contrast it is happy (the camera angles are in reverse to show this.)